After coming close crashing her car, all Fiona wants to do is get herself situated at Darnell Inn for her brief stay. When she arrives, however, she soon realizes that what she hoped would be a peaceful and quiet period of time is nothing but life-altering.



  1. thegreenclairevoyant · October 2, 2015

    Content: 5
    Language:4 “wants to do” is wordy
    Grammar: 4 in the first sentence, make it “close to crashing”

    Yours is really good, it seems interesting!


  2. miasopapilla · October 7, 2015

    Content : 5

    Language : 4 – Use slightly more complex word choices.

    Grammar : 4 – Just a little wordy in the second sentence, perhaps make them into two different sentences.

    I can’t wait to read your story!!!! 🙂


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